Traffic and accommodation problems are increasing and government should encourage businesses to move from cities to rural areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Traffic and accommodation problems are increasing and government should encourage businesses to move from cities to rural areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In Modern world, countries face some challenges, namely traffic congestion and lack of standard accommodation, whereas some people suggest that it would be better to motivate business industry to move to rural areas. This essay will argue advantages of this outweigh the drawbacks. There are a huge number of advantages to decreasing number of cars and providing standard accommodation, but there is one huge disadvantage, the rural inhabitants will not benefit from city life as in the past whereas they can create it in their suburb too.
The main reason of it , moving business industry to rural areas would be cease traffic congestion .That is to say that car numbers can decrease considerably and people commence to drive their work in their rural area instead of commuting.For example ,in our country some companies were obliged to create their branches in suburb and it was a great aid to overtake it.That is fact ,a great deal of inhabitants live in substandard housing in big cities and it threats their body and mental health.This new opportunity can help them to go back to their hometown and relieve stress from annoyed city life.For instance,there is no doubt that numerous people come to city , because there are more challenges to struggle financially in their neghbourhood.
Those opposed to this say that it can be cause people to lost opportunity living a big city.However, they can demand and strive to gain all conditions which they need. For instance, I have been living in suburb since I was born and essential facilities are provided both by government and by ourselves.
On balance, the fact that moving cars to suburb territory and gaining standard living environment clearly outweighs the weak point that people cannot meet as same opportunity as it is in the city

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Average: 7.6 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, whereas, for example, for instance, no doubt, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06060606061 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85308001068 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565656565657 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 42.0 20.2975951904 207% => Sentence length is too long
Sentence length SD: 212.978776369 49.4020404114 431% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 214.714285714 106.682146367 201% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 42.4285714286 20.7667163134 204% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.7142857143 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 34.0 5.01903807615 677% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168809717599 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774354555124 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422709151872 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0992854249604 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588871197964 0.056905535591 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.6 13.0946893788 180% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.85 50.2224549098 57% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.7 11.3001002004 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.96 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 10.1190380762 186% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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