Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on young children.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Thinking about how destructive can be the consequences of using computer by children has become a worry among families. This magic creature has increased its use day by day and many children are addicted to it without knowing this issue.
When computers had begun their journey to homes after workplaces it seemed that they are very helpful in people lives, and maybe nobody be aware of their th overusing consequences. Furthermore, children use computers as a playing instruments and sometimes they play games for hours without having a bit movement. Therefore, computers have influenced on our children’s health. They have no physical activities and obesity becomes the major problem of families. Unfortunately, problems in vision, violences in adolescents, mental problems and disregard for school duties, all are because of using computers by our children in their frequent times.
Sometimes, the reason of overusing of computers is, fulling children spare time by such leisures because parents claim that they are not able to control their children demands. However, on top of all, before buying a computer device for a child, we should inform him/ her about negative effects of computer and children should dedicate a special time for both beneficial and entertainment use of computers.
All in all, from nursery schools to high schools, educational infrastructures should be able to inform students and children about negative impacts of computers. Also, parents should be able to control their child when using computer, and in my opinion every home should have a separate room for computer use to avoid overusing by preparing appropriate schedules.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...orry among families. This magic creature has increased its use day by day and man...
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... When computers had begun their journey to homes after workplaces it seemed that...
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Suggestion: is
...lpful in people lives, and maybe nobody be aware of their th overusing consequence...
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
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...hould have a separate room for computer use to avoid overusing by preparing appropr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, may, so, therefore, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39463601533 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88161833964 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586206896552 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6692327336 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.0 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7272727273 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196254415985 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829057259303 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341472905628 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127056973909 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0132815964207 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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