Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on young children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include and relevant examples from your knowledge or experience
Access to computers has increased significantly over recent decades, and the number of young children using computers every day has risen too. Some people say that this phenomenon has more negative than positive effects. However, I strongly believe that this trend has both advantageous and disadvantageous aspects.
Using computers every day can have some demerits we can easily to recognise. It is evident that computer has transformed the way of communication and influenced relationships in society. Young children always access to computer to communicate rather than face-to-face interaction. They will rapidly lose their interconnection and mutual help. Additionally, sitting in front of a computer for a long time may affect the eyes and health problem on children. Constantly staring at the monitor screen stresses out children's eyes and causes unpleasant feelings. Moreover, Overusing computers may indirectly effect on children's education. They easily reproduce knowledge, and it leads to poor creativity. This also makes children increasingly dependent on computers instead of doing assignments by themselves.
From my point of view, computers are an valuable resource to help young children explore the world around them. For example, children use computers to satisfy their curiosity about different countries, cultures or even universes. Some children have to live far away from their parents, so computers enable them keep in touch with their parents. By using many tools like internet chats, video calls and various applications. Children can make a long conversation with their parents, express their love for them, and also see their face through webcam features. Finally, computer is an effective device for relaxing after studying. Children can listen to music, play game, and read e-book. Because of some extraordinary websites, computers will be an impressive place to relieve stresses. Some websites children can enjoy like noisli ( it has the sound of nature), or coffitivity ( the sound of environment in a coffee shop). Therefore, it is understandable why young children love immersing on computers.
We cannot admit that computers provide unlimited benefits for children. Despite some drawbacks, it still an indispensable effective tool for anyone. Using computers every day is not a negative side, it depends on how children use, the information they approach, and the purpose of them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60382513661 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99710835388 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603825136612 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.8105139004 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.04 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.64 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04 7.06120827912 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275062336451 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788671739524 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545411153109 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186867299902 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0128514244431 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.61 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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