We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Essay topics:

We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Personally, I do not totally agree with this statement. The reason why is that if everyone just only considers his/her own country and community, that actually is limiting our way of thinking and interrupting the process of globalization. Also, it may cause a recession to the global economy, and causes the unemployment rate to increase.

First of all, if we don't help those people who we can help, that will let them suffer from starvation and poverty. Meanwhile, if we just consider our society and country, it will let us lose a chance to explore the world and limit our thinking ability. The reason why is that if we just think about ourselves, that will let us consider not fully. But if we in the statement, that will confine us just think of one side and neglect the other side.

Next, the act of the statement disagrees with globalization. That will mean countries won't consider others, and it will affect those third-world countries’ economy deeply. Due to globalization, many jobs were created in those poor countries. That is because their labor and land costs are cheaper, compared to those rich countries such as the UK and the US. The benefit of globalization is that not only those rich countries can take advantage, but also those poor countries can take it too. When the external investment flows into those undeveloped countries, it can help them boost up their economy, and build more facilities to improve their life environment and qualities.

On the other hand, if the government cannot deal with their problem properly, in this case I agree with it. The reason why is that I believe that a country always puts their citizen on priority, no matter what situation the country is in. What if a country cannot properly solve their own problem, how it can help the other countries.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, so, third, while, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 24.0651302605 220% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1499.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88273615635 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7055210667 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540716612378 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5904986443 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6875 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1875 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9375 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289888359348 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0991069457684 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738602837573 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171123314879 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410080811976 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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