Young people are often influenced by their peers. Do the advantages of peer pressure outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, some teenagers are outgoing then the others. Regardless, this phenomenon also means that their are a lot more easily affected by their friends. Do the negative impacts that peer pressure brings is greater then its positive impacts? This essay will give my opinon and offer my reasons and supporting examples.
First of all, peer pressure can cause mental health issues and takes away adolescents’ identities. It is because peers to some teens are very vital, some of them might think if they don’t follow their peers’ actions that means they are not respecting their friends. Thus, it will cause a huge mental pressure on teenagers. For example, sometimes even though the person might not want to do that, but due to the peer pressure he or she have to engage in certain action, otherwise they might lose their friends. Meanwhile, peer pressure also let teens lost their identities. That is because the more teenagers follow their peers the more self identities that they might lost. For instance, I have a friend who really very likes Japanese cartoons but when their friends discover this habit, they say it’s only bored people will watch these. Since that I never see him to share any Japanese cartoon to me. Hence, peer pressure can really change a person even his or her identity and it is possible to causes mental health problems.
On the other hand, peer pressure can help youth to build up positive habits, if they have a good social circle. In other words, if their friends like to learn, then this learning atmosphere will affect other people who within this circle, thus it will bring positive competitive relationships between teenagers. Moreover, peer pressure also can be used to encourage teens to overcome their hardships. For instance, I used to fail the math exam many times, but when I saw my friends they all passing it and some of them obtained a good result, I started to put more time in math, as a result, I got the highest mark in my class. Therefore, peer pressure can help teens to face some difficulties.
As I have discussed, peer pressure just like a double egded sword, if people can use it properly it can become a stimulus of success. However, I think that the negative results of peer pressure is more huge.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, i think, as a result, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 24.0651302605 249% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 390.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82051282051 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43939829401 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517948717949 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 575.1 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4940343011 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.3 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290691140696 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105959052349 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695665350818 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192506690939 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499070108913 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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