It is often thought that rich nations should allow more numbers of refugees enter their territories and assist them with essentials including accommodations and catering. I completely disagree with this opinion because I think accepting refugees will cause security issues and there are other better ways for wealthy countries to help refugees rather than providing basic aids.
Firstly, it has been a present issue that growing numbers of population are crowding into richer countries from their troublesome homelands. These miserable people are bringing serious security problems to their developed destinations. Some of them risk their lives committing crimes because they cannot find jobs in their new homes, the so-called wealthy countries. Those refugees becoming criminals are not only harming themselves but also damaging the communities around them, with innocent citizens being robbed, threaten, even got shot. Apparently, it is a totally losing situation for both, the rich nation and the poor immigrants.
Secondly, there are more helpful means for the developed countries to support the individuals from developing countries rather than simply aid them with basic needs. Easily given with food and housing, people would gradually become lazy and lose motivation for living. Nevertheless, providing them opportunities of education and employment instead of living basics can bring fundamental changes to their destinies. For example, investing money into industries can certainly create more job positions, and building schools can let more students trained and skilled. With such help, refugees can earn their own bread and dwellings by their educated intelligent.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that wealthy countries should consider the security problems which refugees may bring about, and think of more advantageous development such as supplement in education and employment but not only basic conditions to assist the poor immigrants.
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...nditions to assist the poor immigrants.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, firstly, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.79310344828 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76809579677 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634482758621 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1544360513 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.230769231 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298282462349 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967979062675 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749078933115 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197866593742 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832298189376 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.6 12.4159519038 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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