When new towns are planned it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time To what extent do you agree or disagree

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When new towns are planned, it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

To design new cities, construction of parks and gyms is overrides the importance of shopping complexes for people’s leisure time. However, some people consist of this idea, I am of opinion that shopping malls are as important as parks or sports centers in a town owing to some compelling reason.
To begin with, the most rational justification in favor of building sports facilities is that these centers are of vital importance to the quality of inhabitants' lives and have far-reaching positive impacts on their health. That is, since most of the people living in the cities suffer from overcrowding, air pollution as well as stress and strain, construction more parks and sports facilities lay the groundwork for people to benefit from tranquility and relaxed atmosphere. Furthermore, these places are ideal to strengthen individuals' social and cultural relationships who are devote virtually their whole times to working. For instance, developing local parks in the vicinity of residents’ house and providing variety activities in different fields that contributing to enhance mental health of citizens.
On the other hand, the supporters of shopping centers to spend leisure time put forward argument that these locations bring more vitality and liveliness. That is to say, the people who opt to these shopping centers for spending their free time, can benefit from a wide variety of recreational facilities such as restaurants, coffee shops, cinema and playgrounds for children and they could spend a quality time with their families. In addition, shopping malls lay the groundwork for the offering an easy access to vast number of products that would cater for people’s needs such as cloths, foods, and toys and so on.
To sum up, considering the points discussed above, the most rational conclusion to be drawn is that building shopping centers share equal importance as construction of parks and gyms.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: who is a are
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Suggestion: devoted
...cial and cultural relationships who are devote virtually their whole times to working....
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'easy access'.
Suggestion: easy access
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, then, well, for instance, in addition, such as, as well as, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31907894737 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89563196388 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559210526316 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.3735281446 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.7 106.682146367 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4 20.7667163134 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.4 7.06120827912 218% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368558182695 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138625159525 0.084324248473 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635807008312 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213446231608 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586663341685 0.056905535591 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.17 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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