When new towns are planned, it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Although many people believe that it is crucial to construct public parks and sport amenities when a new town or city is planned, others contend that shopping centers should be the first priority in terms of the design of a place. This essay absolutely agrees with the second group mostly because of creating varied job opportunities as well as promoting public health, after all.
Firstly, creating public parks and sport facilities is beneficial for the plan of a city for the reason that it will possibly lead to a myriad of job opportunities. In this regard, there can be various jobs in the neighborhood that not only promote the welfare of the public, but they also help individuals to make a living easily in the community. Take Eram amusement park in my city Tehran in Iran as a clear example. There are hundreds of thousands of people working in different sections of the park such as security guards, sanitation workers, fast food outlet staff, electronic devices operators, and sport trainers who provide classes for the easger individuals, to name just a few. Indeed, these amenities are essential for the future of a town.
Other than that, building sport facilities and recreation grounds makes a profound contribution to promote public health in general. It means we can help the public to do exercise in these playgrounds, participate in numerous sport classes and leisure activities, campaigns, and ceremonies such as mountain climbing, cycling, hiking, and particularly, nature tourism. A clear example is AT&T Stadium in the United States which is one of the most gigantic sport arenas in the world with different ranges of classes and activities that has made it as one of the most eyecathing tourist attractions in the neighborhood as well. Thereby providing these sport spots and recreation areas is highly likely superior than building shopping malls.
In conclusion, while many state that building shopping complexes play a pivotal role in terms of planning a town, others claim that public parks and sport venues are more vital. However, I believe that making more job vacancies and increasing public health are concrete evidence to vote for the second party.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
...reation areas is highly likely superior than building shopping malls. In conclusio...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun state seems to be countable; consider using: 'many states'.
Suggestion: many states
... shopping malls. In conclusion, while many state that building shopping complexes play a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, so, well, while, after all, in conclusion, in general, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10863509749 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72091668765 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571030640669 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.0406675527 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.076923077 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6153846154 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.38461538462 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297403787834 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100246501415 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066045026366 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178343690429 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246308668152 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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