Write about the following topic.
People should choose their course of study not on the basis of their own interests, but based on the kinds of jobs they can get.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
It is proposed that one's knowledge acquisition process should be directed in accordance with real job opportunities instead of what he is interested in. To a certain extent, I agree with this proposition.
On one hand, there are sound reasons justifying the notion of people orienting their education towards available job offers in the marketplace. Firstly, this strategy helps learners to focus on developing their professional competencies to attain important tangible results that are their future employment. Such job-oriented training, in my opinion, will definitely equip young aspiring jobseekers with necessary skills to compete in the modern workplace. Secondly, while interests are an integral part of our lives, pursuing hobbies do not always translate into being able to make a livelihood. For instance, while playing the guitar is immensely popular among young people and the number of amateur guitar players is increasing, the remunerations for these people are still evidently low and often insuffice to cover their bills.
On the other hand, I do believe that interest-oriented education has distinctive disadvantages. Psychologically speaking, following our passions permits us to sustain enthusiasm and establish a serious sense of commitment to do the tasks related to our fields of interest. This is crucially for us to attain success in our chosen fields. In addition, despite helping learners to be more employable, a study experience with no regards to one's personal preferences often results in long-term dissatisfaction in many ways. A good example here is in Vietnam, the trend of studying economics among students on a massive scale has generated thousands of graduates who fail to harness their innate abilities in other fields and have to settle for dead-end jobs with few prospects of promotion.
In conclusion, I personally think that education choice should be considered on both grounds: personal orientation and actual job availability.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1679.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55960264901 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17345195859 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.645695364238 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.467871137 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.153846154 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2307692308 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4615384615 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213005850861 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725896448423 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042727410279 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118512246859 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047619513617 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.27 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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