Advanced technology comes with a dilemma of whether we should restrict our children's screen time or not. While electronic devices may have positive influence on kids, I would argue that limited use is critical in some cases.
On the one hand, young generation can benefit from using latest technology. In the future, smartphones will continue to evolve and it is a good idea to allow our children to get used to it from a very young age. This can make them become tech savy in the long run. In addition, internet contains a valuable source of information, thus youngsters can learn new knowledge or even new skills by surfing websites from home. For example, every time children have a question that can not be explained by their caregivers, they can use Google search to look up the answer.
On the other hand, excessive screen time may prevent children from outdoor activities and social interaction. Smartphones and tablets can be addictive and time-consuming. If kids spend too much time on playing video games, the risk of them getting chronic diseases is likely to increase due to lack of physical activity. Their engagement to social relationships will also drop. This can create tremendous affect to their physical and mental health. Furthermore, there is many toxic content online such as violence, pornography,.. which will poison a child's mind.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that technology plays a crucial role in children's development. However, it is clear that we need to set a limitation in terms of children time spent on the Internet as well as their viewed content.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, thus, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1333.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03018867925 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80426872898 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.649056603774 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.5247834771 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.3125 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5625 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149672144155 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044536806162 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515593422805 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0977559746747 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302825518737 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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