Write a narrative essay about someone or something that influenced you

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Write a narrative essay about someone or something that influenced you.

it is certain that there are numerous people who influence us in a lot of particular ways, both positive and negative effects. it is obvious that these people may bring us happiness, but they may also make us hurt. From my personal perspective, the person who has positively influenced my life most is my mother.

From a very young age, she was aware of the importance of getting a good education. In fact, my mother was born and raised in a poor family of six and she was the only girl in the family, so it is obvious that she did not have the opportunity to get a higher education. therefore, she always teaches me that getting a good education should be the top priority in my life. indeed, despite the fact that my mother never teaches me any lessons from school, she does not forget to encourage me to try to study. However, I realize that she has not ever forced her dreams on me. In contrast, she taught me how to plan as well as follow my personal dreams. Honestly, I try constantly to study in order to pursue my dreams. Entering university may be the first achievement to repay my efforts and the encouragement of my mother.

On the other hand, my mother is a caring , hard-working as well as patient woman. In fact, I remembered an unforgettable memory when I went to university. that was the first time I had stayed far away from home. because of her caring and anxiety, she always called me every single day in order to ensure as well as remind me how to protect my health. Besides, my mother must work hard to earn money in order to support my father in paying living expenses. she has trained an extremely strong will and ability to deal with numerous difficulties when she was a little. indeed, most young people would have lost hope and given themselves up to be disappointed when they had to encounter a lot of failures. Nevertheless, my mother has stood up to move on from her failures because of her patience. therefore, the ways in which she overcame her failures has inspired me about the values of strong wills. The lessons I studied from her helped me become more and more brave to cope with any challenges in my life.

In conclusion, there is no doubt that my mother is the most positive and important influential person in my life. No matter where I go, I always remember her advice so that I become as strong as her. I always want to talk to my mother as much as possible because I am sure that I can learn something new from her.

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Average: 4.1 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, honestly, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, no doubt, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 80.0 24.0651302605 332% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2023.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 455.0 315.596192385 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44615384615 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57000235182 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487912087912 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 649.8 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 5.43587174349 331% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.2100257986 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.2916666667 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9583333333 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91666666667 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0225865634676 0.244688304435 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00800949933371 0.084324248473 9% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0180130687801 0.0667982634062 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0208026204749 0.151304729494 14% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175625736218 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 12.4159519038 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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