Writing task 2 Some old customs and traditions are not useful presently so should be given up To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Writing task 2: Some old customs and traditions are not useful presently, so should be given up. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Following the development of technology, many customs and traditions have been introduced to netizens, it also reveals a bunch of blind believers who practice useless and even harmful behaviours. Controversially, people cannot tell the difference between necessary beliefs as well unhelpful ones, therefore, bad customs and traditions should be given up and probably banned. Further in this essay, I will discuss more about the complication of the problem along with the possible solution.
First and foremost, it is undeniable that not every single old-fashioned behaviour is bad, however, some of them might hold some sort of values. Accordingly, it acts as a way for people to appreciate their current living, and be thankful for the legacy of the ancestors. Moreover, these customs and traditions provide each individual with valuable lessons, it also brings knowledge about their origins. Not only can it teach youngsters about their family, it can also educate kids to respect all the contribution of the former members.
On the other hand, there is a great number of people who follows non-sensible activities such as fortune telling. It is obvious that these old-fashioned beliefs are designed a long time ago with insufficient purposes or usages. As the civilization develop, these behaviours become a waste of time due to the lack of usefulness. In addition, they do not contribute to the spiritual life of people negatively, but only mislead everyone. Not just that, these types of customs and traditions are being taken advantage of to trick blind followers, causing them to lose money. Such activities could also drive people insane, turning them into addicts as they are willing to devote all of their belongings to obtain invisible fortune.
In conclusion, it is clear that some old customs and traditions should be embraised and preserved while other ought to be banned. Old-fashioned behaviours which are negative would only bring people bad luck, as a result, it is best that laws should be enforced to forbid any deceiving customs and traditions in order for the society to grow productively.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 376, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, as for, in addition, in conclusion, sort of, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26331360947 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92489253198 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58875739645 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.942696809 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.6 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5333333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0666666667 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198040875487 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634409695295 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071391965481 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129357692865 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064935728579 0.056905535591 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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