You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Some say that because many people are living much longer the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably To what extent do you agree or disagree You should write at least 254 words

Essay topics:

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

You should write at least 254 words.

It is now believable that people are living longer than before due to the modern and progressive medical facilities. As a result, many people think the age for considering retirement should be changed to later years and the workers should continue working for longer period. However, I would like to disagree as I believe it will do more harm than good to our society and nation.

As people age, their learning ability decreases and so it will be difficult for them to adapt with the new and improving technologies related to their work. Furthermore, their working efficiency reduces significantly as well as they are less likely to welcome any change happening in the working environment.

Secondly, the health of older employees, who are more than 60 years old, are more likely to deteriorate if they are under the pressure of working. Older people tend to develop diseases like diabetes or more prone stroke or heart attack, and if that happens inside the office building, the employers have to pay out of their own pockets as a part of health insurance. In order to avoid such economic losses, the employers like to let go of the older job-holders as early as possible.

Thirdly, working longer than the retirement period will lead to unemployment of the newer generation. A company can only hire so much employee. So, if they hold on the previous workers, the young graduates of our society will never found a suitable job.

On the other hand, the retired people feels insignicant and useless as they loose their contributions to the community. On the contrary, they have so much experience regarding the society and history. So, maybe incorporating the experience they have is not a bad idea as long as it does not have a negative effect on their health and on our community.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, as a result, as well as, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1489.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88196721311 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73360053579 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554098360656 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6377727174 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.357142857 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7857142857 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7142857143 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136539294575 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487770658871 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604131434673 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0784738665469 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720035081803 0.056905535591 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.