You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly Others value quality of work above appearance Discuss both these views and give your own opinion Give reaso

Essay topics:

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic.
Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.

It is believed that people should dress smartly when they go to their organizations. However, others think that the work quality is more important than the appearance. From my experience, it is as a coin has two side, the appearance and the quality of work are both important in business.
On the one hand, it is a fact that people tend to judge the workplace through its environment or especially the outfit of people working in that workplace. For instance, the appearance of people working in the workplace can show others the environment of the organization. It is powerful to express the polite and professional environment or a bad one. Hence, dressing smartly and suitably is influential in the organizations.
On the other hand, the work quality is necessary to improve businesses. If people pay attention on their work, their results, which they will receive, will be impressive. Moreover, not only will they have more chances to go to higher position and to earn more money, but they also have more opportunities to be self-development. Furthermore, from my own knowledge, some of the success people are dress smartly and their quality of work does not need to doubt. They are, thus, become a successive people throughout the period self-improvement.
To sum up, not only be the appearance important in workplace of some organizations, but the results of well-work are not as less important as the dressing people wear in the workplace. Therefore, people should improve their appearance and dress smartly and suitably. Besides, they need to focus on their work to receive the best consequences.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1343.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0679245283 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12232170739 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475471698113 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 416.7 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9155170853 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5333333333 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185167397404 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787768120933 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600442990841 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13368240812 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529184860954 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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