You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.
Why might this be the case?
What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Compared with the traditional jobs like working for a big cooperation or being a member of an organisation, a lot of workers prefer to have their own businesses,which is becoming more and more popular in current society.
As for why people especially young generations are likely to establish their personal businesses, many factors ought to be taken into consideration. First of all , worker may have more chances to make more money when they start to open a computer shop or a Chinese restaurant instead of having a stable but low salary, as they can realize their full potential without too many restrictions and try their best to make the company better. Secondly, men and women can choose the kinds of jobs by their interests and talents, which is sure to encourage them to find what is the most suitable job for them. A man is not willing to feel tired, boring or stressed when he is doing what he enjoys. Thirdly, a more comfortable and less competitive working atmosphere is the thing which big company or official office can not supply. For example, the graduates whose major is computer science may feel nervous when they have to compete with their colleagues in the same department of an IT cooperation.
However, there are several disadvantages if too many people choose to be self-employed. Firstly, from the perspective of the development of a country,there maybe a huge shortage of some official working positions like police, doctor,or administer of a library which play a crucial role in a society. This may result in the disorder or destruction of the stable situation of a country,and in the end this will cause a bad influence in everybody’s daily life. Secondly, from the point of the individuals who are self-employed, it is a quite significantly big challenge for them to start their own businesses because they may lack the working experience and money which are two vital factors that devote to a man’s achievements in business.
In conclusion, people may choose to be self-employed in terms of salary and working environment,but on the other hand, a young graduate may fail in the road of establishing a new company as there is not a good leader or instructor to help him of her. Also, a country needs enough workers to do some basic but important jobs like police,teacher,sales manage and so on to keep the order of a country’s development.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
...kers prefer to have their own businesses,which is becoming more and more popular in cu...
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Line 3, column 162, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e taken into consideration. First of all , worker may have more chances to make mo...
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Line 3, column 975, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
...ir colleagues in the same department of an IT cooperation. However, there are se...
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Line 6, column 150, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...spective of the development of a country,there maybe a huge shortage of some official ...
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Line 6, column 233, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , or
...al working positions like police, doctor,or administer of a library which play a cr...
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Line 6, column 384, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...ion of the stable situation of a country,and in the end this will cause a bad influe...
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Line 9, column 96, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
... terms of salary and working environment,but on the other hand, a young graduate may...
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Line 9, column 336, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , teacher
...ome basic but important jobs like police,teacher,sales manage and so on to keep the orde...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, as for, for example, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 403.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9205955335 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13083001905 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548387096774 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.4789668751 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.538461538 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 20.7667163134 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5384615385 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183949863917 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736926550549 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799484123551 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115339959687 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286350522389 0.056905535591 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.