Young people are often influenced in their behaviours and situations by others in the same age This is called peer pressure Do the disadvantages of peer pressure outweigh the advantages

In general, the youngster circle is developed by peers which are named as peer group pressure. I argue that this situation will take more benefits than the drawbacks if the youngster has positive peers around them.
To begin with, the drawbacks of peer group pressure will lead youngsters in the wrong direction. When the interaction between youngsters and peers goes to the negative value, youngsters will feel that they have a responsibility to follow the most behavior in these groups, even though the youngsters know that it is wrong. For instance, in terms of bullying at school, many youngsters and peers build some groups in their communities, then, as a piece of bad news, some groups will recruit youngsters who have an ability to bullying their friends. Therefore, negative peers in the youngster circle will lead to the shape of bad personalities in the future.

Although it will take some drawbacks, peer group pressure also shapes the youngster’s personalities in some positive values. First of all, some studies said that a good external environment in youngsters' life will motivate children to compete to be better people. For example, the youngsters who conduct a relationship with clever friends, then indirectly they will follow the way those friends to be clever. Secondly, peer group pressure leads the school to take some benefits from it. For example, in Indonesia, some schools apply peer group pressure methods in terms of choosing a group of classes. Some groups of students who have negative impacts in their circle will be determined into small parts and surrounded by students with good personalities. Hopefully, this situation will erode the negative behavior and substitute with positive attitudes.
In conclusion, peer group pressure can bring a significant change among youngsters. The benefits will be higher than the drawbacks if they are managed.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in general, first of all, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25496688742 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8044637429 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503311258278 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8400116347 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.8 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1333333333 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.13333333333 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161534797525 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795996958641 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548192726515 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127876640035 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253741466499 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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