Since the 18th century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace. With today’s technology this process is happening at a greater rate. Technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Technological advances always have an impact on people at work. Sometimes it can mean that people are no longer necessary in their job, but sometimes they make people work easier. We can define technology as scientific knowledge used for practical purpose in industry and commerce. I would also like to make a further distinction between this and high technology, which is electronic or information technology.
In my view, technology really began to have an effect on industry in the early of the 20th century. The result of this was that certain industries like the car industry did not really need as many people, as automated machines and robots were able to do jobs such as painting the car, or putting the car together.
However, if we now turn to look at the effect of high technology on the workplace, in my opinion, there has been a different effect. It is true that computers are able to do some things that people used to do and advanced in high technology have made people’s lives better through improvement in communication. For example, now we have e-mail, MSN and some electronic tool to chat with friends or business partners. In addition, people working in service industries like banking use computers much more than pen and paper nowadays. In addition, some work can be done from home, which means that people do not need spend time travelling and can work where and when they want to.
In conclusion, technology has resulted in unemployment in some traditional industries like car industry. On the other hand, in other industries such as service industries, technology has improved the way the work.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 620, Rule ID: NEEDNT_TO_DO_AND_DONT_NEED_DO[3]
Message: Did you mean 'to spend'?
Suggestion: to spend
...me, which means that people do not need spend time travelling and can work where and ...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... work where and when they want to. In conclusion, technology has resulted in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, really, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in my view, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1366.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98540145985 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81564553322 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569343065693 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1051600105 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.076923077 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3846153846 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222015496351 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898825328808 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665102904521 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134488678789 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461249528342 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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