22.09.2017 Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.
Which do you consider to be the major influence?
Some pundits aver that inherited traits play more significant role in forming personality than experiences obtained in a life time. Below the prospect will be discussed in details and author’s opinion will be stated.
On the one hand, characteristics with which people born have a considerable influence on personal development. Primarily, physical characteristics such as gender, race and body type have a crucial impact. A tall, pretty, European woman would apparently have distinctive personality than an unattractive and chubby one; even if they both were born and educated in the same culture. Moreover, some personal traits such as the ability to absorb and recall information or to keep being focused on a task for a long period of time seem to be inherited. A group of psychologists that studied intelligence decisively demonstrated the correlation between parents’ IQ and their offspring’s one. That means the more clever and smart mother and father are, the more intelligent their progeny will be. In other words, inheritance indeed has a grave effect on personal growth.
On the other hand, experiences that are undergone by individuals must not be neglected. In fact, circumstances in which a child was brought up are pivotal for forming personality. Perhaps, the best illustration may be the sociological research that was conducted among couples of identical twins. The siblings in each couple were adopted by different families and although the siblings in each couple have the same genes, the kids that were fostered by wealthy, well-educated upper-class citizens were more successful, confident and smart than those who were taken by poor, ill-educated parents. Additionally, perception of physical features, for instance, body constitution differs from country to country and the same features often have different impact on modeling identity. Thus, culture in which a person is brought up and social experiences that a person comes to know forge one’s individuality.
In my opinion, although characteristics succeeded from parents are important for development of a human being, the role life experiences outweigh them. From my point of view, passed-down traits could be seen as the foundation on which a personality is built via having a wide variety of experiences.
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flaws:
1. No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
2. 'In my opinion,' and 'From my point of view,' are duplicated:
In my opinion, although characteristics succeeded from parents are important for development of a human being, the role life experiences outweigh them. From my point of view, passed-down traits could be seen as the foundation on which a personality is built via having a wide variety of experiences.
advised:
In my opinion, although characteristics succeeded from parents are important for development of a human being, the role life experiences outweigh them. Passed-down traits could be seen as the foundation on which a personality is built via having a wide variety of experiences.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 357 350
No. of Characters: 1886 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.347 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.283 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.09 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.189 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.285 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.482 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.043 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
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flaws:
1. No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
2. 'In my opinion,' and 'From my point of view,' are duplicated
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...sonality than experiences obtained in a life time. Below the prospect will be discussed i...
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Line 3, column 512, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...keep being focused on a task for a long period of time seem to be inherited. A group of psycho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, for instance, in fact, such as, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1961.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49299719888 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23950033969 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596638655462 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9718449197 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.352941176 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47058823529 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239588843512 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751006462249 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05764222827 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139839872199 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346129920112 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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