TPO-32 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays a vast part of population tend to believe that today we are less happy and satisfied with our lives because the world around us keeps changing with unthinkable pace. Although I could understand the idea which is behind this viewpoint, I cannot agree with it because of the reasons which will be discussed in details below.
Firstly, the world has become more equal, fair, unbiased toward minorities. Since 1960s the world has kept changing in a positive way to African American, Hispanic and other nationalities as well as toward LGBT society. Although the changes are quick they have mostly positive tone, for example, women, African American got their votes on elections of all levels, members of LGBT society have stopped to be labeled as mentally ill persons and in recent years get right to be married and adopt children. All of those changes made our society a better place for living where each person, at least theoretically, may be who he or she wants to be without a fear of being prosecuted or charged for being different.
Secondly, a quick advancement of technology has greatly and positively impacted on the society as well. We live in a quickly changing world this stance has become a cliche at the same time, we tend to underestimate the grandiosity of the changes and their impact on us. Technology has alleviated the toil of all levels of employees from a factory worker to an engineer. Today we use tools which allow us do the job more efficiently and quickly then used to be and therefore our productivity has skyrocketed; as a result our income has increased as well. Technology has changed our everyday life as well. Modern items such as smartphones, laptops, e-tablets and even smart- fridges make our existence easier and happier. In fact, an average person who properly uses modern technology may have a better life than a kind in the Middle ages.
Admittedly, there are some reasons which may be mentioned by a person who believes that today we are less satisfied and happier than our predecessors. Chiefly, the one may aver that our contemporary has a greater access to information which allows him to compare his life with life of others. A person who lived fifty years ago, may exist happily because he knew that his neighbors have similar income and similar life; by contrast today the one may look at an Instagram account of billionaires who like to show up their wealth. However, I still buttress that today a person has a better life which is full of satisfaction because the envy to your neighbor is a subjective perception of the reality which does not reflect an actual reality. If a person looks at the world via unbiased prospect, all his complaints will disappear unquestionably.
To wrap up, although some people may assume that we have less satisfied lives, a more close look at the evidence discussed above they will definitely change their mind.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
with unthinkable pace.
with an unthinkable pace.
they have mostly positive tone,
they have mostly positive tones,
may be who he or she wants to be
may be whom he or she wants to be
We live in a quickly changing world this stance has become a cliche at the same time, we tend to underestimate the grandiosity
We live in a quickly changing world this stance has become a cliche at the same time, and we tend to underestimate the grandiosity //there are two sentences
more efficiently and quickly then used to be
more efficiently and quickly than used to be
a more close look at the evidence discussed above they will definitely change their mind.
a more close look at the evidence discussed above will definitely change their mind.
by a more close look at the evidence discussed above, they will definitely change their mind.
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
Double check grammar issues after essay writing in 3 minutes.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 496 350
No. of Characters: 2353 1500
No. of Different Words: 261 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.719 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.744 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.614 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.105 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.356 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.789 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.547 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.169 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 117, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...Since 1960s the world has kept changing in a positive way to African American, Hispanic and other...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, as to, at least, for example, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2416.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87096774194 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69125058935 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530241935484 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 767.7 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7306044917 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.157894737 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1052631579 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84210526316 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163311906465 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537723410851 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559619482288 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112496483832 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0674193494285 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.