27/10/2017 Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers.Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.
There are some sports activities such as base jumping, skydiving and Formula one racing that are popular despite being dangerous for the well-being of those who take part in them. Below some reasons of the popularity and possible solutions to the problematic situation will be given.
To begin with, practicing those activities has some benefits. Firstly, doing diving or any other extreme sport appears to be the simplest way to attract public’s attention. In fact, a psychological research conducted in the European Union demonstrates people may become addictive to crowd’s attitude and being prized could be compared to having a drug fix. Secondly, putting life and health in real danger summons very strong emotions on its own. To illustrate, when I did my first jump from an aircraft, I was alert, fascinated and happy simultaneously. This specific feeling motivated and encouraged me to continue doing this sport for many years. In other words, the addiction to strong, positive emotions seems to be a likely root of the issue.
However, there are some actions that may alter the conduct of the sports people. Primarily, changing public’s attitude to those who participate in extreme sports from positive to negative may be effective. If skydivers are treated like insane individuals who should seek medical attention, they will lose public support and consequently the pleasure that is brought by it. Losing it may work as an efficient deterrent. Furthermore, increasing safety standards could decrease the risk of injuries dramatically. For an example, prohibiting skydiving in inclement weather and forcing sportsmen to use a protective gear could annihilate many threats. So, discouraging athletes from practicing some sports and enhancing safety might address the problem.
In my opinion, the main cause of the spreading of the dangerous sports is emotions and feelings that are invoiced by doing them. If public support and the likelihood of death are being decreased, the number of those who take part in those activities and casualties will decline.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. Auxiliary verbs are over used. for example:
Furthermore, increasing safety standards could decrease the risk of injuries dramatically. For an example, prohibiting skydiving in inclement weather and forcing sportsmen to use a protective gear could annihilate many threats. So, discouraging athletes from practicing some sports and enhancing safety might address the problem.
2. wrong pronouns used and repeated:
...who take part in them.
...that is brought by it.
that are invoiced by doing them.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 327 350
No. of Characters: 1698 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.252 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.193 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.764 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.194 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.283 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.464 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.037 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, in fact, such as, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39143730887 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92111205874 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60244648318 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6061460698 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9444444444 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38888888889 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224221941626 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675159397253 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052339712131 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142110987187 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267261683604 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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