Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples.
The world keeps changing with an unimaginable pace, this is unquestionable fact, however, how this pace impacts on us is a theme for a discussion. My stance and reasons on which it is based will be discussed in details below.
At first, we ought to look at the modernity from a subjective prospect of an average person who has an access to the internet, social media, TV shows and other modern means of communication. This person has an access to a plethora of personal information of many people with whom he can compare his own life and success. This possibility may lead to feeling of deep dissatisfaction and even depression. For example, a youngster who live in inner city of Chicago who belongs to a family with low income and who has no possibility to achieve a better live might be subscribed to the Instagram accounts of popular artists, millionaires etc. Unfortunately, this comparison ought to have a grave negative influence on happiness of the person. If the young person had no access to the photos and videos, the one would have no knowledge about conveniences of life of the wealthy and therefore, there will be no reason for being upset.
However, if we look at the modernity from an objective point of view, we inevitably will conclude that today's people have happier lives than our predecessors. Apparently, such horrible disasters of the past as famine and starvation have become a part of history about which we might occasionally read in a textbook. Moreover, progress and technological development gave us a vast number of items which undoubtedly alleviate our lives, for instance, fridges which allow us keeping our food fresh, automobiles which give us indispensable opportunity to travel conveniently, aircrafts which fabulously reduced the amount of time needed for traveling on huge distances. Furthermore, the level of life has skyrocketed during the former century. In fact, our life expectancy is unprecedented in the history of this planet. In other words, from an objective prospect our lives are happier than ones of our fathers and grandfathers.
To wrap up, there is an obvious discrepancy between subjective and objective viewpoint of the happiness and feeling of satisfaction. Social media gives us access to information which makes us depressed and dissatisfied about our lives, at the same time, the real situation is quite positive, I think that in the nearest future this discrepancy will be overcome after the mankind will adapt to new means of communication as well as the humankind got used to printed newspapers and the radio.
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Essay evaluation report
this is unquestionable fact,
this is an unquestionable fact,
For example, a youngster who live in inner city
For example, a youngster who lives in an inner city
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 26 in 30 //very good arguments
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 426 350
No. of Characters: 2104 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.543 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.939 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.96 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.439 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.528 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 101, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...e prospect of an average person who has an access to the internet, social media, TV shows...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...means of communication. This person has an access to a plethora of personal information o...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 638, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ts of popular artists, millionaires etc. Unfortunately, this comparison ought to ...
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['apparently', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i think', 'in fact', 'as well as', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.24358974359 0.229887763892 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.130341880342 0.158761421928 82% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0897435897436 0.0866891130778 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0363247863248 0.046263068375 79% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0470085470085 0.0685040099705 69% => OK
Prepositions: 0.130341880342 0.118717715034 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0320512820513 0.0351676179071 91% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.04949003129 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0299145299145 0.0309702414327 97% => OK
Particles: 0.00213675213675 0.00188951952338 113% => OK
Determiners: 0.111111111111 0.0887237588012 125% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.025641025641 0.0209618222197 122% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0277777777778 0.0139019557991 200% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2584.0 2387.08602151 108% => OK
No of words: 426.0 408.028673835 104% => OK
Chars per words: 6.06572769953 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.352112676056 0.338922669872 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.265258215962 0.251872472559 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.199530516432 0.174417080927 114% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.159624413146 0.112833075102 141% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04949003129 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546948356808 0.524397521467 104% => OK
Word variations: 63.7286836105 59.2087087015 108% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 26.625 20.5533526081 130% => OK
Sentence length SD: 86.2476222498 48.84282405 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.5 120.699889404 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.625 20.5533526081 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0625 0.644075263715 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 53.1508215962 45.7405998639 116% => OK
Elegance: 1.9 1.45489161554 131% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218537421388 0.300154397459 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.106496406434 0.103427244359 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0447177993152 0.0752933317313 59% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.555271376737 0.497263757937 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133313626392 0.151897553556 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969160844663 0.114077575197 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411284385522 0.0781384742642 53% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.297193432685 0.336927656856 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.121930800316 0.067059652881 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161644394534 0.210909579961 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0197396984432 0.0618886996521 32% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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