29.10.2017
Some people think that spending a lot on birthday celebrations and wedding is a waste of money.But others think that it is important to young people and the society.Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many aver celebrating lavishly birthdays and weddings is an unreasonable action. Other claim having opulent celebrations is crucial for the society and young individuals. Below both prospects will be discussed and author’s opinion will be given.
On the one hand, spending a large amount of money on the discussed events is not a necessity. Firstly, traditions and customs that are associated with having big celebrations have lost their pivotal meaning in today’s society. In fact, the number of city dwellers keeps growing steadily, it means people who belong to different cultures, confessions and nationalities have to co-exist. Thus, a new cosmopolitan culture is being forged that is adapted to living in those novel circumstances. Secondly, young adults have many urgent needs that must be satisfied. For instance, the cash that is wasted on a celebration could have been used as an initial fee for an automobile credit or a mortgage. If resources are not spent wisely, young people will not have a possibility to live independently from their parents for a long time. So, adhering to the archaic tradition is a waste of limited resources.
On the other hand, there are those who believe celebrating important events lavishly has a deep meaning. Primarily, wedding and birthday parties served as a tool that allowed young members of society to move from one stage of their lives to the next one. A big event attracts a huge number of relatives, friends and colleagues who witness this step forward and help the young adults to realize and comprehend this alteration. Furthermore, the discussed tradition brings families together and has a crucial importance for maintaining family ties. Each noisy party is a reason to remind people that they are a part of the same community who shares common history and values. So, the discussed habit has an advantageous influence on those who are being praised and the society.
In my opinion, the contemporary society keeps developing and although the old way of celebrating used to be crucial for the well-being of the community, today the custom become obsolete and may be forsaken.
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Essay evaluation report
Each noisy party is a reason to remind people that they are a part of the same community who shares common history and values.
Each noisy party is a reason to remind people whom they are a part of the same community to share common history and values.
today the custom become obsolete
today the custom becomes obsolete
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flaws:
1. we didn't get the idea from this reason or it is not clearly developed:
Firstly, traditions and customs that are associated with having big celebrations have lost their pivotal meaning in today’s society. In fact, the number of city dwellers keeps growing steadily, it means people who belong to different cultures, confessions and nationalities have to co-exist. Thus, a new cosmopolitan culture is being forged that is adapted to living in those novel circumstances.
2. 'that' is over used and the style is repeated, like:
traditions and customs that are associated
is being forged that is adapted to
urgent needs that must be satisfied
the cash that is wasted
as a tool that allowed
to remind people that they are
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 348 350
No. of Characters: 1745 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.319 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.014 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.791 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.472 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.283 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.466 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.02 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, in fact, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18390804598 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92473404428 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57183908046 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2867523356 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.222222222 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05555555556 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186158793053 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582086170169 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0291335955786 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112112519541 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468870463481 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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