9. Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Whilst some people believe that being a teenager brings a great deal of happiness rather than being a responsible mature when getting older, others are of the belief of the opposite view. This essay will discuss both sides of this debate thoroughly before a reasonable conclusion will be reached.
On the one hand, the teenage years are often seen as the most exciting period of many people’s life simply because of their less responsibilities and relatively more freedom. This is to say that a teenager, unlike adults, usually does not have to care about paying bills, proving himself at a workplace or competing with other businesses’ owners in an increasingly competitive market. Added to this, a remarkable characteristic featured adolescence years which is freedom to do whatever one may desire whenever he is passionate to do so. Such qualities definitely do contribute to less stressful life and often lead to a sense of fulfillment and happiness in this early stage of almost anyone’s life. A recent survey has been conducted by “the Childhood Care Organization”, on 200 British families living in London, has revealed that 80% of teenagers within these families found to be extremely happy and satisfied about the way they live their lives, while the ratio has dramatically decreased to only 25% when same questions introduced to their parents.
On the other hand, some people may think that being a mature is far more rewarding because a person probably gets paid and even the sense of responsibility and commitment either at home or work is a positive and enjoyable in itself. In other words, when people start their careers, they likely have much more money rather than when they were unpaid youngsters. In addition to this, many individuals do passionately enjoy caring about their loved ones or work commitments, and they never consider this as a disadvantageous. For example, while I was a child, I frequently asked my parents to travel to Europe during summer holidays, but they refuted due to either lack of monetary resources or their irrational strict parental control. Nevertheless, after I had graduated, I got a decent, well-paid job, and since then I have been visiting numerous countries the world over during my annual leave.
In conclusion, having presented the aforementioned ideas and instances, it can be concluded that although the many merits for the teenage years such as lower accountability and absence of many work or family-related constraints, I do believe that being paid worker and self-independent mature can bring more happiness to our life because of the real sense of self-independence in terms of one’s financial and social decisions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2285.0 1615.20841683 141% => OK
No of words: 437.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22883295195 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14044027103 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 176.041082164 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597254004577 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 723.6 506.74238477 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.7436971676 49.4020404114 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 175.769230769 106.682146367 165% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6153846154 20.7667163134 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3076923077 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183477225446 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645775719225 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577166940756 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108416869791 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271901874961 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 50.2224549098 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 11.3001002004 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.65 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 78.4519038076 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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