Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Diverging opinions have been voicing over, whether, advertisement agencies deviate people from the reality of life or in fact making our lives better than before.I believe advertisements are doing more damage than good to people and only few advertisements speak of a sane mind .In this essay, first I will explain the advertising culture prevalent in the society and lastly will discuss the few positive ad campaigns.
Nowadays our society is engrossed to the idea of physical beautification. Everywhere we look, we see the fair skinned and toned body ladies on billboards and television screens.Such companies tap into the insecurities of a person which is relevent to their gender.For instance,For asian girls,most commercials shows big eyed models or fair skinned models for south asian girls.These ad agencies not only prey upon the female population but males suffer from the similar complexes, if not more. toned muscle structure and perfect jaw line of male models have boxed men to inferior complex.These superficial standards have created mental illnesses in the mind of younger generation.A recent study was conducted between two support groups.One support group showed happiness and feeling of contentment compared to the one who was exposed to daily television advertisements.The latter group not only felt anxious, but developed mental complexities in later time.
However,There are few companies which instigate the positive attitude or awareness in the minds of people.but they only contribute to the miniscule amount to all the other product placements.Most of the time, the advertisements promote into the unnatural beauty standards of men and women.
In conclusion,I believe the current advertisement culture is in bad shape and therefore, requires a major overhaul in terms of creative and realistic ideas.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, lastly, look, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57857142857 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16901452525 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.646428571429 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 46.0 20.2975951904 227% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 145.927778941 49.4020404114 295% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 260.333333333 106.682146367 244% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 46.6666666667 20.7667163134 225% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.0 7.06120827912 212% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0928628016071 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0384340981473 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482172771352 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0555975043212 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502882764493 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.2 13.0946893788 215% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 7.87 50.2224549098 16% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.6 11.3001002004 209% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.97 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.16 8.58950901804 130% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.4 10.1190380762 202% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 20.0 10.7795591182 186% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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