Being a celebrity- such as a famous film star or sports personality- brings problems as well as benefits.
Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
Being in the public eye- such as a movie star or professional football player- has its benefits and
its drawbacks. Overall, this essay believes that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. The
essay will first discuss the financial rewards celebrity brings, followed by a discussion about the
lack of privacy, before giving a reasoned conclusion.
Celebrities are not only known the world over; they are also fabulously wealthy and this is the
primary reason why it is so beneficial. They often become millionaires overnight and this allows
them to buy whatever they want for themselves and their loved ones and all for doing
something they love. Premiership footballers are a prime example; with most of them being
able to support themselves for the rest of their lives, after earning over $50,000 per week, on
average, for many years.
However, it is often argued that this comes at a price and that price is the destruction of their
private lives. Many complain that they can’t cope with living ‘inside a goldfish bowl’ and they
would trade their newfound wealth for anonymity. For example, ‘A-listers’ like Kanye West are
hounded by Papparazzi wherever they go and can never lead a ‘normal’ life again. However,
they do have a choice and there are very few stars that stop what they are doing, give away
their money and return to normality.
In conclusion, the financial freedom associated with fame and its many benefits, far outweigh
the problems, particularly constant attention from the press and fans.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'rewards'' or 'reward's'?
Suggestion: rewards'; reward's
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1334.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.336 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97069419497 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.66 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 396.9 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.3668728866 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 121.272727273 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7272727273 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90909090909 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 4.38176352705 411% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0733806624289 0.244688304435 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0307004482233 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366878121865 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0237204695713 0.151304729494 16% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394469171504 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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