Childhood obesity is an increasing problem in Australia. As many as two thirds of children are now obese.
Schoools have a responsibility to monitor what their students eat and amount of exercise they do.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Obesity in children is slowly turning into an epidemic in Australia. Most people think that it is attributed to the lifestyle that has recently evolved. I would agree more to the statement as it is obvious that schools could play better role in taming the kids than what they could possibly grasp from home rules administered by parents. This essay will discuss on the details of how far it will be effective if schools take the responsibility to monitor.
Childhood obesity is a growing concern in the lives of Australians. On an average the homes are not enough regulated to administer the kids into what their activity is. Most parents are busy chasing their career growth, life necessity and daily chores. Therefore, as their part to play in the observance and nurturing the kids for a balanced lifestyle becomes hard. It is hard for them to supervise the kids completely on a given weekday due to their own preoccupation. In this situation, school would be the better option for a kid to develop better habits.
Schools play a greater role when it comes to monitoring a kid as it is so viable for them as the kid is being supervised in the class. A school can easily set rules for the kids and demand the follow of such rules. At home with emotional demands they can easily get away from the regulations they are subjected to. The joint study conducted by the "Centre for health and nutrition" and "University of Notre Dame" published its results last year, suprising many parents how their kids become vulnerable to obesity due to their inadequate nurturing of food habits and regular physical activity. Whereas, the schools being the institution of nurturing the future generation should be more responsible in monitoring a kid in matters of food consumption and physical activity.
To conclude, it is so obvious that though parents equally responsible to their kids health and activity, the schools have wider access to a kids life making it possible for them to administer the habits of kids and wherever required implement correction.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1720.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94252873563 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83859761355 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520114942529 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1910653387 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.5 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.9375 7.06120827912 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146412420395 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547726194084 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457544420166 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980285719969 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451007084244 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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