Children are taught to push themselves to try and be better than their classmates, rather than work together for everyone's profit. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?
People are encouraging their children to be more competitive than other students, instead of seeing everyone's betterment. It has both pros and cons. I believe that it is more advantageous to be better than other classmates because such a tendency contributes to the overall development of a child.
Proponents of healthy competition in the classroom cite a host of benefits. If a student would di his or her work alone, without anyone's influence, he or she can concentrate more on their tasks. This will not only boost children's overall results but confidence too. Therefore, they will not fill any hesitation, when they will face any new challenges in their future.
Moreover, if children are taught to be the best from others, they would feel more supported by their guardians as well as more independent without unnecessary restrictions, which always curtail one's efficiency. It has been proved scientifically that independence is the first crucial step towards creativity and innovation. In this throat-cut competition, it is extremely imperative to be more creative, so that children can become a powerful problem solver.
On the other hand, one of the biggest disadvantages of competitiveness is the inability to be a part of any team. Students who are always taught to think about themselves can never show a sense of co-operation due to their self-centered attitude. They fail literally to perform, where their efforts are the most essential such as in any group task in the corporate world. A former CEO of Infosys company, for example, murder useless in the made a huge loss in the company due to his such nature, when he did not think of his employees' profit. Thus, it is also pivotal for children to teach about co-operation.
In conclusion, I think that if a child can help himself or herself at first, definitely, he would more successful to lead any group in the future keeping everyone's profit in the center. Such qualities make children more responsible feature's citizens.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1685.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13719512195 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0358690016 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594512195122 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7361168831 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1176470588 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2941176471 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205547015843 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058359344744 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486469567782 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109974165611 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551935071666 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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