Children obesity is an increasing problem in Australia.As many as two thirds of children are now obese.Schools have a responsibility to monitor what their students seat and the amount of exercise they do.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Obesity in the younger generations is becoming increasingly problematic, especially in Australia where approximately 33% of children suffer from the preventable disease.Some people suggested that schools should be responsible for the prevention and treatment of their student's weight issues by monitoring their food intake and exercise output. This essay will discuss why I completely disagree with the proposition because it is far too draconian.
The main reason why Australian schools should not monitor their student's food intake and exercise output is because it is not their job; it is the job of the parents. Schools are responsible for education, and they can certainly educate children on the value of nutrition and exercise, but watching what they eat and how much they exercise is not in their purview. For example, it would be far too invasive for a teacher to ask students what they have been eating at home and how much they have been exercising. This would lead to all sorts of problems with parents and teachers even though it may yield results. In short, parents should remain responsible for raising their children healthily while schools should focus on educating them.
A secondary reason why schools should not meddle with children's diets and exercise regimes is because it may have negative psychological impacts on the students themselves. Although teachers are excellent role models for children, again, it is not their role to monitor their health. If a teacher were to single out a student for being overweight, for instance, it could have profound negative effects on the student including isolating them from their peers and promoting bullying. Even if a student is obese, a teacher should not reference this in the classroom and certainly not ask them about their eating and exercise habits. Clearly, this is a bad idea.
This essay discussed why schools should not be part of a child's prevention or treatment for obesity because it is not their role and it may cause mental problems for the child at hand. In my opinion, I completely disagree with the proposition that childhood obesity is a responsibility of schools.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, so, while, for example, for instance, in short, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1808.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16571428571 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79180140806 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 542.7 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.0873448939 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.142857143 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92857142857 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264721138896 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975583751906 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591259313338 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170930786924 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048222327149 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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