Children in some parts of the world have less responsibility compared to children in the past. Some people think this is a positive change, however others think of it as a negative change. What do you think?
Now a days the burden of responsibilities taken by children in some parts of the world is less as of previous generation. While some argue that it is a negative change, however I believe that it has positively impacted our society because of concentration on education and learning of family values.
Undoubtedly, there are several benefits of sharing responsibilities. Most important of them is that the children learn about the value of money. For example, the teenagers who work part time are getting familiar with the hardship of earning of money. By doing so, they are sharing the responsibility of their parents by either paying for the books or part of school fees. Therefore, by working offspring's can share the burden of their parents in purchasing stationary or in paying school fee.
Nevertheless, children having few responsibilities outweigh the children with more of it. Firstly, they can fully concentrate on their education. The children who work part time often get tired and cannot able to complete their homework or doze off in classroom as a result they lack behind in education as compared to the ones who are not working. Secondly, the dropout rate of kids from schools who are working more than the ones who are not. Additionally, a recent survey published by the Save Children in Pakistan has given an alarming figures of kids being not completing the education. According to it, approximately 70 percent of the children who works leave school before graduation because of financially supporting the family.
Furthermore, the countries where kids share less responsibilities are spending more time with their families. Since, they only go to school, therefore, they spend most of the time at home either completing homework or playing with their siblings. Fon instance, I used to spend my free time while playing with my younger brother and helping my mother in doing house chores. Therefore, kids learn family values which ultimately has a positive impact on a society.
In conclusion, although children learn the value of money while sharing responsibilities, however they cannot able to concentrate on their studies and not only dropout from school but also spend less time with their families. Therefore, I believe that it has not a positive impact on the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.168 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97766978245 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493333333333 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 598.5 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0912551552 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7368421053 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47368421053 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166310219603 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575766248308 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650466167635 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114397331315 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0914028798749 0.056905535591 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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