Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Considering a ubiquitous fact, which is irrefutable, majority of children are glued to their computer or cellphone these days. This is not a positive development because when children spend the day playing games on their computer or gaming console, they would develop many health problems. They may even develop behavioral problems. In my opinion, it is more beneficial for children to spend time outdoors playing sports or engaging in other activities.
On the one hand, undoubtedly outdoor games are good for children, owing to the fact, they make them fitter and stronger as people. Children who play such games are healthier. They are also less likely to engage in antisocial activities. Better still, outdoor games require the participation of more than one person. When children play games such as football or cricket, they are also learning several social and management skills. As a result, they learn to share and work as part of a team.
On the other hand, children who spend the time indoors will most probably spend several hours in front of the TV or computer. This may lead to several health problems such as obesity and diabetes. These children may also find it difficult to interact with others. Also, when they spend a lot of time on their computer, they are more likely to be exposed to inappropriate materials on the internet. All of these factors can have an adverse impact on their physical and psychological well-being.
To end, it is not hard to see that there are several benefits to engaging in outdoor activities. Parents ought not to allow children to waste their whole time in front of the TV or computer. Even in those families where both parents are away at work, progenitors can use software programs to limit their children’s exposure to television and the internet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...act, they make them fitter and stronger as people. Children who play such games ar...
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Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun social seems to be countable; consider using: 'several socials'.
Suggestion: several socials
...ball or cricket, they are also learning several social and management skills. As a result, the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, still, well, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00993377483 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71041609776 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523178807947 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1475619392 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0555555556 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7777777778 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174574993628 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546654175852 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440265612246 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103910557627 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516799795563 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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