Children who commit crime and are less than 18 years should go for education rather than punishment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics: Children who commit crime and are less than 18 years should go for education rather than punishment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Immatures who make crimes should go for education instead of going to jail and got punished. I actually disagree with this point. For this reason, i will explain in details why.

In recent years, we daily hear that children are commiting crimes. As it is just for a rediculous reason. Someone killed one's father, because his father did not buy for him a playstation game. Hence, this child think to kill his father due to his rejection of buying him such a game. In addition, if this child was released, and was sent to education structure, he would find it easy to kill someone else. Therefore, we sometimes believe that education does not work. It will lead to create another problems. So, they must get punished due to their passive actions. And they should be exposed to justice. Furthermore, immatures will find it serious. As, they might comprehend that they responsible about their own incidents.

Besides, in case of sending to jail, they will feel blamed about it. So, they will beging to do corretion against their bad deeds. While they are in the prison, they may take education and guiding them through the right way. In that light, they can find a room for growth healthily. So that, they can take from darkness into light.

Moreover, correction court plays has important impact on those immature. So, it can increase awareness on them. Although, disciplinary action is helpful, but it should judge to be prisoned permenantly in jails. As a result, it will affect on their future.

To sum up, they have to be responsible about their bad deeds, so that they can take it seriously. Or else, this pehomenon will constantly in increase.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, in addition, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1378.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85211267606 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53042388361 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616197183099 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 5.43587174349 331% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.2975951904 54% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.2029653277 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 55.12 106.682146367 52% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.36 20.7667163134 55% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.8 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10127261596 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0302830740556 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494277749301 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0654758101268 0.151304729494 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742042320688 0.056905535591 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 13.0946893788 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.23 50.2224549098 154% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 11.3001002004 46% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.67 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.1190380762 63% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.7795591182 56% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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