A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (ages14-18) improve their teaching. It is considering two plans:1. Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert for additional training in how to

It is a general rule that the more attention governments pay to education, the more successful a society can be. In this regard, myriad committees have been established in order to increase the knowledge of teachers. However, there are some arguments in the practical methods. Some prefer to teach teachers in some classes and some others want to use online courses for each teacher. In my own perspective, I do believe that online courses can be more effective. Two possible reasons are elaborated in the following paragraphs.

First of all, with the advent of the internet, online materials can sufficiently save not only time but also money in many cases. In fact, the necessity of the presence of people decreases with the developing of new technologies. In this way, people can sit at their own desk in their private room and learn whatever they want by just clicking on some links and watching or reading some materials on the computers. For example, my father is a teacher, he also is the manager of an especial part of their school. His responsibility forces him to hold different classes for new teachers to increase their experiences. At first, he always attends numerous classes and because of the heavy traffic which we have in our city, he was always complaining about his situation. Due to the amount of money that he spends for gas and also the time he spends on commuting, he was not convinced of his income. However, once he used online courses through some websites, he was totally happy because he can easily stay at home and talk through Skype with other teachers. From that time up to now, my father becomes a big fan of the online courses.

Secondly, nowadays it is accepted by most of the scientists that individual training has more significant effect on the learners than the geranial ones. As a matter of fact, people have a different approach toward thinking and also learning, therefore, they use various types of education. This is exactly true for the current issue. Each teacher has a different method and can learn more efficiently in an especial way so it is logical to serve that kind of learning for them. For instance, there was a specific program in our company which was mainly related to improving the managers' ability in risk management. All of us were the force to attend a class, listen and take note while a professor was speaking continuously. Most of my colleagues lost their motivation to continue the training, although it was a completely interesting and important topic for managers. They mainly suggest that they cannot adapt themselves to the professor and they should have some courses more specific. In this regard, our supervisor decided to establish an online course that though it the managers can have their own individual training program which was absolutely a success for the company.

In sum, above form aforementioned explanation, it is obvious that I do believe online courses are more practical and effective. This is because of the money and time that can save perfectly and also the high effectiveness of individual training. That's why we should be aware of different aspects of online materials.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Line 7, column 579, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'managers'' or 'manager's'?
Suggestion: managers'; manager's
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, in fact, kind of, as a matter of fact, first of all, in many cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 24.0651302605 245% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 41.998997996 169% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2640.0 1615.20841683 163% => OK
No of words: 536.0 315.596192385 170% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92537313433 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.20363070211 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75970108893 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 176.041082164 151% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496268656716 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 841.5 506.74238477 166% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 5.43587174349 294% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9974088383 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7777777778 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8518518519 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130463678384 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372644278115 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459652808285 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0757817379236 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357515635536 0.056905535591 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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