An increasing number of children are overweight which could result many problems when they grow older both in terms of their health and heath care costs. Why do you think so many children are overweight? What could be done to solve this problem?
Nowadays, obesity in children is becoming a challenge in the world This leads to several negative impact on their bodies as well as on the pockets of their parents. In this essay, we will discuss the cause of this problem and possible solution to curb this issue.
While technology innovations have played vital role in making human’s life easy, but few inventions have left adverse impact o the health. For instance, mobiles tablets and gadgets have turned people into couch potato. Specially, children now prefer to stay in the room and spending time playing online games. Due to lac of outdoor acivities, their weight is being increased enormously. Furthermore, processed food has also occurred fatal impact on their bodies. Excessive intake of fats made them lazy. According to the study conducted at Harward Business School, stated that children of 21st century are 18% fatter then 20th century kids and this percentage is expected to grow in coming years.
Once the children hit the alarming level of weight, parents rusk towards the doctors for the cure of their dearer. Taking the condition into the consideration, doctors are likely to prescribed them costly medicines.
There are several steps which can be taken to resolve this issue. Starting from the home, children should be refrain from using mobile phones and laptops for longer period rather encourage to play outside as it will help to build their muscels. Similarly, schools should disallow fast foods and emphasis on home made cusines. Moreover, they should made an exercise period as mandatory.
To conclude, this issue needs to be address immediately as it can impact the upcoming generation who has to run this country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 623, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...children of 21st century are 18% fatter then 20th century kids and this percentage i...
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Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'refrained'?
Suggestion: refrained
...rting from the home, children should be refrain from using mobile phones and laptops fo...
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Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'playing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: playing
...tops for longer period rather encourage to play outside as it will help to build their ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, similarly, so, then, well, while, as to, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1435.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18050541516 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50508742225 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664259927798 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.0012717835 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6875 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3125 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4375 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164870127649 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475141067183 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347721416029 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0841749506202 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031423496679 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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