It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together. Include any relevant examples from your experience.
In this current market world, the relationships among family members are deteriorating due to different reasons. In past days, people lived with their extended family members, however it has been changed over the years and most of the people prefer to live only with their immediate family. There are myriad of advantages and disadvantages involved with this matter, in this essay, I shall discuss on the reasons which makes family members apart and the solutions to bring them closer as well.
First and foremost, in majority of the cases family members tend to live in different locations due to studies and employment. Students prefer to study in abroad universities considering the resource availability of those countries and the quality of education as well. Besides, a qualification from a university of a developed country is much recognized in the job market than a qualification from a university in developing country. Secondly, people go abroad for better employment opportunities together with better prospects and high standard of living as well. On the other hand, technology has also created distance in some ocassions, where as some people get addicted on video games and television wasting time which could be used to build healthy relationships with their family members.
Consequentely, governments can take initiatives in bringing families in a way of setting up new universities in the country, as joint ventures with foreign renowed universities. They even can expand the number of student intakes and introduce new courses to attract students who are willing to go abroad for studies. In addition, both the government and the private sector can invest in different sectors to generate employment opportunities to the workforce with handsome incentive packages.
In conclusion, it is recommended individuals to live closer to their family because they can get emotional and physical help whenever they face difficulties in life. It is also believed, communicational tools can bring family members together in some ocassions whenever they are living in distance, by the ways of video conferencing, e-mails and other sort of mediums.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, in addition, in conclusion, sort of, by the way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40828402367 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04235820037 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559171597633 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 33.007081901 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.615384615 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92307692308 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165942246159 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574237266541 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467794476498 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0993410109158 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390165176634 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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