It has been noticed that recent young people are spending their leisure time in shopping centers but not engaging their selves in other activities such as sport or music.
Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
How children and adolescents are supposed to spend their free time has long been a controversial issue. Nowadays, it is obvious that youngsters prefer to spend their spare time in shopping malls rather than doing sports or other activities such as music. It is argued whether this development is beneficial or not. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument before a reasoned conclusion is drawn.
Those who support the idea of children spending more time in shopping malls than in doing sports believe that young people should be allowed to enjoy their time with their friends, and shopping malls are the best venues for that. For example, now shopping centers do not only consist of shops, but also cinemas, food court outlets, as well as high-end restaurants. Hence, youngsters can easily do more than one activity in the same place. That makes it clear why the fact that adolescents tend to spend more time in leisure centers has garnered support.
Despite these reasons, opponents of the fact that children spend less time sporting or practicing hobbies have more convincing reasons; First, doing sports regularly is crucial for children and youth due to its concomitant health benefits. Second, Exercising nurture their minds, souls and bodies. Moreover, practicing sports in teams trigger children to compete and maintain a healthy social relationship with their friends. Finally, practicing hobbies are imperative and extremely advantageous. Music has been proved to be benificial, furthermore, it helps youngsters in focusing and relaxes their minds, which is why it is obvious that children ought to spend more time doing spots and practicing hobbies as music.
In conclusion, although spending leisure time in shopping centers may seem more preferable and enjoyable for young people, I agree that it is not a positive development, owing to the numerous positive effects of exercising and music. That is why parents are recommended to encourage their offspring to spend their time wisely.
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Suggestion:
...s may seem more preferable and enjoyable for young people, I agree that it is not...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, second, so, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28660436137 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6715570786 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545171339564 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4180788978 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.133333333 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.73333333333 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395989718215 0.244688304435 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127359100138 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0934372356339 0.0667982634062 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256360938785 0.151304729494 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472239137224 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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