LEADERS AND DIRECTORS IN ALL ORGANIZATIONS ARE NORMALLY OLDER PEOPLE. SOME PEOPLE THINK YOUNGER LEADER WOULD BE BETTER.
AGREE OR DISAGREE
It is often argued that younger leaders would be better while leaders and directors in all organizations are normally older people. I completely disagree with this opinion and think that younger people cannot be leader and succeed as it do older people for two reasons, which the following essay will explore.
First and Foremost, I believe that proficiency and knowledge are being gained due to hard and consistent work during years. Consequently I think that young people, instead of becoming leaders at once, must first work on improving their skills and gain experience for becoming qualified specialists, as well as widen their horizons and expand their knowledge. They need a lot of years to work hard to fulfill this purpose. Without these skills and knowledge they cannot succeed as leaders of organizations, inasmuch as due to the lack of experience they can make a lot of frequent mistakes, which in it’s turn can affect adversely on the future of these organizations and bring them to bankruptcy. Anyway, when it comes to older leaders, we should attack an attentions to the fact that in most circumstances they have already gained necessary skills and knowledge in the walks of their lives and they are ready to become successful leaders with making right decisions and running organizations fairly well. Therefore, this is an argument that we cannot put aside in my point of view.
Secondly, I think that the current age of the leader has a significant importance for creating equilibrium within company and building balanced relationship with other workers. As a matter of fact, almost all organizations have both young and older employees and I think older workers will not manage to work productively and effective, always having in mind, that it is unfair, while having more skills they are anyhow inferior to a younger leader. This will have an absolutely negative impact on them in my opinion.
For example, I have a friend who was a superintendant in a large company when he was 28 years old. He was certain that he would manage to succeed and he was sure he would be able to gain knowledge and skills by years. But he failed as he hadn’t enough experience of running large company in different challenging and hard situations. Moreover, he failed to build good relations with employees.
That’s why I thing that young people are not ready to become good leaders of organizations and during their young ages they would rather work as an ordinary employees, gaining skills and knowledge from their older supervisers in order to become future leaders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, i think, as a matter of fact, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 10.4138276553 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 55.0 24.0651302605 229% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2161.0 1615.20841683 134% => OK
No of words: 430.0 315.596192385 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02558139535 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79159772308 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486046511628 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 659.7 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.1344684457 49.4020404114 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.0625 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.875 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.125 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299042833401 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102786378844 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157722252071 0.0667982634062 236% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209272601099 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.201893197938 0.056905535591 355% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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