A lot of people believe that the amount of violence shown on TV and in the cinema affects the actions of you people and therefore increases the amount of violence in our society today.
Do you agree or disagree with this statement? What can be done to reduce violence in our society today?
Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is a well known fact that today’s world is full of violence not only shown on TV and in the cinema but also in real world. I strongly agree that TV and cinema have direct influence on the increasing amount of violence in today’s society.
Firstly, majority of young people are spending to much time in the virtual life, playing video games and watching television. It has very back impact on the kids in their most important time of the life, when they are developing moral values for their future life. For example, on video games nothing is real, and the life of the character controlled by youth can be replaced as many times as we want. This can create crocked image of the world.
Secondly, in television we can see large amount of violence and brutality. We can try protecting our kids from seeing it, but they still will see some of them. Besides, from the age of eighteen young people can watch everything. And these maybe encourage, youths to mimics what they see in the television because they may not know difference between good and bad behavior.
However, to reduce violence in our world, kids should be taught essential values of the human being from their parents. Because parents are taking full responsibility for their kids and their education.
Moreover, kids should be encourage developing their hobbies and practical skills for their future life.
In conclusion, I believe that violence can be reduce to the minimum in today society only by parents which encourage their kids to be a good person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
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Message: Did you mean 'encouraged'?
Suggestion: encouraged
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, well, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1289.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88257575758 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52056509399 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549242424242 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 389.7 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.3756047181 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0714285714 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8571428571 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229007202129 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866724671231 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765894674127 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121274038989 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783024896307 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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