A lot of people believe that the amount of violence shown on TV and in cinema affects the actions of our young people and therefore increases the amount of violence in our society today.
Do you agree or disagree with this statement? What can be done to reduce violence in our society today?
Nowadays, TV and cinema have become a great source of entertainment. People of all ages find it interesting to spend their spare time on watching movies and TV serials. But teenagers get easily influenced by the actions shown in films. Most of the people think that violence shown in movies and other shows broadcast on television has bad impact on young people due to which violence in society also increased. I also agree with this statement and going to explain my views in
following paragraphs.
Youngsters are fond of watching action movies and try to copy the stunts performed by their favorite heroes like driving cars at high speed on busy roads, performing bike stunts on roads and they may met with an accident and also cause damage to others. Beside that, watching movies in which actors rob the banks, adults tried to do such tactics in real life and when they get caught, in order to save themselves they harm others or even may take life of innocents. Moreover, young people find their favorite stars cool while smoking, drinking and harassing the women. They also started doing such evil activities and it becomes their habit to drink and smoke and when they are not in their senses, they indulge in anti-social activities like fights, accidents, women-harassment, rapes etcetera. In films and serials, it has shown how villains take revenge from a girl when she says no to him by throwing acid on her, by threatening her to cause damage to her family members and by passing comments on her. Adults also adopt such ways to treat a girl and sometimes, girls get too much disturbed that they commit suicide.
There is a great need of controlling such emerging violence. It is the prime responsibility of parents that they can teach their children that theater and TV shows are just source of entertainment. Moreover, it is also a responsibility for the movie makers to state at the start and end of movie that stunts are performed under supervised conditions or by experts and do not follow them in real life. They also make it clear that smoking and drinking is injurious to health. Beside that,
government should ban movies in which extreme level of violence is shown.
In conclusion, I would like to say that youngsters do not have grown minds, they are not able to differentiate between good and bad. So, it should be the responsibility to parents to make their children aware so that they do not have to suffer from great loss. Beside that, film-makers and government alsotake this as their responsibility for the welfare of citizens and to maintain peace in society.
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Suggestion:
...atement and going to explain my views in following paragraphs. Youngsters are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, while, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 41.998997996 171% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2153.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 446.0 315.596192385 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82735426009 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66500642497 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526905829596 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 647.1 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8100373968 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.315789474 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4736842105 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47368421053 7.06120827912 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133964229141 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466609478722 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050924566253 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0775295839677 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0858105500863 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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