Many children nowadays are spending more and more time inside rather than outside. Is this
a positive or negative trend? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your knowledge or experience.
In era of 21st century, children have multiple options to engage themselves in numerous indoor and outdoor activities. However, it is observed that
most of them prefer to spend more time at home rather than outside. According to me, this is a negative development by looking towards its adverse
affects on health and enrichment of pivotal social skills.
To begin with, it seems apparent that the preference given by offspring to stay at home may lead to various health problems. This means to say that
if toddlers continue to pass time in playing indoor games, they would not burn calories appropriately. In other words, this sedentary lifestyle has resulted in severe health issues such as obesity, diabetes and other chronic disorders. Moreover, playing and spending more time in front of technological gadgets including smart phones, laptops indeed will end up with blurry visions to child. Take for instance, as per survey conducted by the university of California in 2018 revealed that more than 40% pupils in the California who prefer to live at home are suffering from hyper cholesterol which is the prime cause of overweight. Thus, this trend will have negative affect on children.
Additionally, the young generation are oblivious to the paramount importance of outdoor games and outside life due to more preference given to indoor activities. This is because numerous skills can be developed by playing sports with others in open space. To be more specific, if children go outside and mingle with peer group, certain significant skills such as cooperation, teamwork can be inculcated which would obviously benefit them in later part of life. A best illustration is a report published in the Toronto Times on behavior of school-going children last year stated that pupils of Toronto were unaware about importance of social skills owing to their negligence of outdoor games. Resultantly, this notion has negatively affect on enlightment of life values.
To conclude, by looking towards aforementioned discussion, according to me, it tends clear to say that an ever-increasing preference given to spend more time inside by children undoubtedly negatively affects their health and development of essential skills. I would suggest that both parents and teachers join their hands to engage pupils in both outdoor and indoor games.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, for instance, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 41.998997996 164% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30831099196 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84581640616 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563002680965 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4842029931 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.75 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3125 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215648442825 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700008232051 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533509961688 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0918855997594 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733980741833 0.056905535591 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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