The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. School should cut art and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on useful subjects such as information technology. To what extent do you agree?
In the current scenario, an education plays pivotal role for the holistic development of children. Although it is argued by some people that school should remove subjects like art and music from syllabus so that students can concentrate more on other important subjects. I strongly disagree with this view as some recreational subjects not only open door of opportunity but also develop certain indispensable skills which are crucial in the latest world.
To begin with, a group of people who opines to cut down art subjects are oblivious to significance of these subjects in practical life. To be more precise, they consider this as extra burden on beginners and waste of time, instead, the same time could be allocated to learn other important subjects. However, the knowledge about art subjects would broaden horizons of getting valuable jobs. For an example, the students who are expert in music can get better employment in musical industries for bright career.
Additionally, it is an undeniable fact that the basic knowledge about art and music develop skills, such as innovation, thinking out of box and many more. Moreover, the novices could learn about devotion, dedication and determination which certainly will help them to excel in the academic subjects. Consequently, the overall development of student is possible owning to fusion of practical and academic subjects in curriculum. For instance, generally the students who are expert in co-curricular activities are the one who score high in most of academic institutes.
In conclusion, an education institutes are of paramount importance for the growth of children in contemporary world. While it is believed by some people to remove art and music to make students more focused on academic subjects, I totally disagree with this view by looking towards its importance to develop skills and opportunities for employment in the long way.
In the current scenario, an education plays pivotal role for the holistic development of children. Although it is argued by some people that school should remove subjects like art and music from syllabus so that students can concentrate more on other important subjects. I strongly disagree with this view as some recreational subjects not only open door of opportunity but also develop certain indispensible skills which are crucial in latest world.
To begin with, a group of people who opines to cut down art subjects are oblivious to significance of these subjects in practical life. To be more precise, they consider this as extra burden on beginners and waste of time, instead, the same time could be allocated to learn some of the important subjects. However, the knowledge about art subjects would broaden horizons of getting valuable jobs. For an example, the students who are expert in music can get better employment in musical industries for bright career.
Additionally, it is an undeniable fact that the basic knowledge about art and music develop skills, such as innovation, thinking out of box and many more. Moreover, the novices could learn about devotion, dedication and determination which certainly will help them to excel in the academic subjects. Consequently, the overall development of student is possible owning to fusion of practical and academic subjects in curriculum. For instance, generally the students who are expert in co-curricular activities are the one who score high in most of academic institutes.
In conclusion, an education institutes are of paramount importance for the growth of children in contemporary world. While it is believed by some people to remove art and music to make students more focused on academic subjects, I totally disagree with this view by looking towards its importance to develop skills and opportunities for employment in the long way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Suggestion: in the latest
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Suggestion: some
...e same time could be allocated to learn some of the important subjects. However, the knowle...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, look, moreover, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29605263158 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91942225719 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559210526316 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4054932644 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.846153846 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3846153846 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92307692308 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222240739364 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816535170112 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566035059108 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140043292764 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454109813746 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.