In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime?
How can we deal with those causes? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Many nations are witnessing a drastic rise in crime rates. I think this is attributable to multiple reasons such as lack of education, unemployment, an inefficient judicial system, to name a few.
Firstly, education plays a crucial role in shaping an individual’s character. It is education that makes us capable of differentiating right and wrong early in our childhood. Lack of basic education is one amongst the primary causes for increasing crimes. For example, in my country India, a vast majority of population is illiterate. This has a deleterious impact on the society as a whole because people turn to crime without any thought, they cannot comprehend what’s right and wrong. To deal with this issue, primary education should be made available to everyone without any fees and government should take serious measures to make this mandatory for everybody.
Furthermore, the other main cause of the spike in crime rates is unemployment. As it is rightly said ” An empty mind is a devil’s workshop.” When people cannot find work, they have all the free time in the world. They think of crime as a shortcut to obtaining and possessing the riches of life, without any hard work. To tackle this problem, authorities should focus on increasing jobs and also introducing some compensation for unemployed people. In lieu of such compensation, they should be made to do social and community work.
In addition, an inefficient judicial system is equally to be blamed. Failing to punish the criminals in time is yet another reason why people are not afraid of committing crime. To exemplify, India reported the most cruel and inhuman gang rape case a few years ago. It got global attention, there was mass protest, people demanded immediate justice. In spite of such a movement, it took over three years to come out with a judgement and yet the criminals have still not been executed. In such cases, it is the slow and laid-back judicial system which is responsible for many rape cases being reported every single day. I think, if the government imposes severe implications on violating laws, crime rates will definitely see a rapid fall.
To conclude, there is a urgent need for the governments to focus on addressing illiteracy and unemployment problems, which attribute to the rise of crime rates. At the same time it demands for strengthening the judicial system so people fear the repercussions of committing a crime.
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Suggestion: many rapes
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Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, still, then, for example, i think, in addition, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 403.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09677419355 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00689338084 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573200992556 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.751790059 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3636363636 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3181818182 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27272727273 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.9879759519 376% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165513066475 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484157192436 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435260450518 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0936616160031 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.010982466026 0.056905535591 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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