In many countries it is now illegal to advertise alcohol. Do you agree or disagree?
Adverts for beer, wine and spirits are now banned in many nations. This essay totally agrees with this idea because drinking can lead to serious health problems and advertisers can often influence people to drink more than they should.
Advertising alcoholic drink should be banned because alcohol is harmful to a person’s health. Drinking too much causes several conditions including liver cancer, diabetes and brain damage. This put a huge strain on the health service and not only causes suffering to the patients, but also to their families. For example, Russia had a huge problem with alcoholism and many men were dying from alcohol related diseases, but after they decided to stop companies promoting alcoholic beverages on TV and in print ads, it resulted in a huge reduction of such cases.
Another reason why promotion of alcohol should be prohibited is the fact that it influences people unfairly to buy that product. The main goal of any advertising campaign is to sell more and this could be seen as irresponsible considering the harm drinking can do. Commercials often make certain drink brands look cool in order to sway potential customers, and do not actually talk about the dangers. For example, Hennessy adverts often portray a handsome man in a luxurious setting, drinking cognac with a beautiful woman. However, it should be noted that warnings are often put at the end of these ads warning people to drink responsibly.
In conclusion, alcohol is a hazardous product and advertisers should not be allowed to try and convince people to drink it and I therefore believe that more countries should ban advertising of liquor.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: many
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Suggestion: try to
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, look, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1383.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10332103321 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69672784368 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605166051661 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7877250627 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.25 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5833333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177642800208 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637742693266 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563435703643 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116368308038 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309323485583 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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