In many countries, life expectancy is increasing, thereby forcing people to work hard for their retirement benefits. There is an alternative option saying that people should be working earlier in their younger years. Is this a positive or negative develop

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In many countries, life expectancy is increasing, thereby forcing people to work hard for their retirement benefits. There is an alternative option saying that people should be working earlier in their younger years. Is this a positive or negative development?

The worldwide increase in the average life expectancy of people has resulted in many individuals working until they reach their elderly years to pay for their retirement. Nevertheless, there are those who put forward the idea of getting employed at an earlier age as an alternative to this, which I believe to be highly beneficial to the working population, companies, and the entire nation.

In most cases, having a job at a younger age is extremely advantageous to individuals. This allows them to be employed during their most generative years and obtain valuable work experience and marketable skills much earlier in life. In effect, these people achieve greater career success and accumulate wealth ahead of others, enabling them to retire before they get too old to enjoy their retirement.

This practice is also of great help to companies. Compared to older ones, younger employees are arguably more productive, motivated, enthusiastic, and goal-oriented. These individuals can provide new ideas, come up with ingenious solutions, and bring fresh perspectives to the establishments they work for, ultimately leading to improved productivity and financial gains in various industries.

Although it is customary for people to keep on working until they reach the age of retirement, this has proven to be seriously detrimental to governments. Having an aged labor force has been associated with greater employment competition and higher unemployment rates, which can weaken a nation’s economy. On the contrary, the robust increases in economic growth seen in many developing countries today have been broadly linked by experts to having younger professionals recruited into the workforce.

On the whole, being employed earlier instead of working until one ages is clearly an attractive option. Such practice can produce many favorable outcomes, which can substantially benefit individuals, businesses, and communities.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 40, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'company'.
Suggestion: company
... This practice is also of great help to companies. Compared to older ones, younger employ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, nevertheless, so, thus, in most cases, on the contrary, on the whole

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1649.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62798634812 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1078191702 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638225255973 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4865949215 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.846153846 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5384615385 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314436304598 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10033736861 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780546494086 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168117701592 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826886236948 0.056905535591 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.33 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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