Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to people outweigh the disadvantages?
Many museums opt to sell entrance tickets to visitors while others open to the public for free. While historical relics can be preserved better when museums charge for admission, this essay argues that the disadvantage of losing people's interests far outweighs any merit.
The exhibits stored in museums are sure to be taken care of better when visitors are charged an entrance fee. This is to say that the money from the visitors can be used to equip more tools and workers to clean and protect historical items every day. As a result, these items will not be degraded and stay in good conditions for a very long time. For example, the national museum in Ho Chi Minh City, which charges people 5 dollars when entering, always have the shiniest vases and other relics from the Tran's dynasty ready for views. However, even when a museum has items with the best conditions, it is still considered dead if there is no one viewing inside.
A huge drawback when charging an entrance fee is that visitors will become less interested in visiting museums. This is because there are many great activities that cost nothing during the day for people to participate in other than going to museums. If museums are not free, they cannot compete with other entertainment activities; thus, they cannot attract people to come. For instance, the museum mentioned above has been left with no visitors for the last 2 years. This essay believes that this disadvantage causes museums to fail their purpose to educate people about history and, therefore, far outweighs the advantage.
In conclusion, despite that charging admission allows museums to preserve antique objects better, the disadvantage of visitors loss seems to be concerning because the education purpose of museums will be meaningless if there is no one viewing and learning.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... disadvantage of visitors loss seems to be concerning because the education purpose of museum...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01644736842 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51890145215 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572368421053 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4421038174 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.307692308 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3846153846 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365925989314 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12752429018 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079214530485 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238828219259 0.151304729494 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0860878845775 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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