Some people believe that the government has the duty to ensure its citizens have a healthy diet, while others believe it is the individual's responsibility. Discuss both views and provide your opinion.
Opinions differ as to whether the government or people themselves should be responsible to maintain a healthy diet every day. While I think that individuals should take control of their diet, I will discuss the reasons for both sides of the argument.
It is understandable to say that it is the government’s job to ensure a better diet for citizens. Today, a change in the busy lifestyle has created a huge demand for fast food products. This opens an enormous opportunity for large enterprises to enter this profitable market. Hence, only the government has the power to restrict these companies from mass producing fast food and subsequently force consumers to buy healthier products. In Vietnam, for example, since the imposition of higher taxes on fat and pre-cooked products by Congress, Vietnamese citizens now turn to buy more organic and fresh ingredients with cheaper prices to self-cook.
However, individuals should control the balance of their meals as no organizations can manipulate their personal choices of foods. Even when there is a high tax levied, people will still buy fast foods if they cannot resist the delicious tastes. For instance, Koreans still consume a substantial amount of liquor in dinners even after the government’s attempts to increase prices and reduce import. Therefore, it is up to individuals to make sure they eat healthily.
Personally, I side with the latter idea because of one reason. Companies will eventually find a way to lower the cost of production for their customers. Burger King is one example, this burger brand has been continually upgrading its producing process at extremely low expenses.
In conclusion, while the government has the authority and resource to partly intervene with citizens’s diet, it is solely individual’s responsibility to ensure a balance of their daily meals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
Opinions differ as to whether the government or people themselves sho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, so, still, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34915254237 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15825980543 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627118644068 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.487122232 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.2 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152902117495 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495925090175 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570419732226 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0968406428508 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733913429538 0.056905535591 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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