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Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

A plethora of criminals who spent sometime in a jail as a kind of punishment for the first time, might commit more crimes afterward. this due to several factors such as mix all prisoners together and sharing some risky stories. This essay aims to explore in further detail the reasons of such an issue and offers some solutions to overcome it before coming to a conclusion. 
 
To begin with, it’s irrefutable that mixing prisoners all together might exacerbate their attitudes and lead them to become more aggressive in the future. For instance, offenders who had small crimes such as thefts, or dangerous driving  can easily being influenced by other dangerous prisoners who have been accused of murdering or drug trading. Since it gives them the opportunities to hear and learn new bad experience that has made by other prisoners. Brazil has a live example of very bad prison environment. Since every single jail has some dangerous gangs who have been accused of drug trading and smuggling or even murdering. Therefore, there is no valuable impact on offenders who have been charged for smaller crimes. On the contrary, they only will acquire new negative practice.  
 
In contrast, there are some solutions might help in alleviate such a problem. First of all, separate prisoners into several sections based on their crime that they did to avoid sharing some negative experience with other dangerous prisoners. Second of all, enhancing the prisoners thoughts and skills by providing some theoretical and vocational sessions and prepared them to become a productive member of the global society. Denmark as an example has one of the best strategies in dealing with prisoners, as the government encourage them to learn and it provides them some practical sessions such as handicrafts and others in order to prepare them to be an active member of their society. Finally, there is no doubt that the type of punishment is playing a fundamental role in mitigating crime level after prisoners released. Therefore, many advance nations nowadays impose different valuable penalties on offenders such as working as volunteer in elderly house or helping disable people. Such this action has remarkable results on offenders' mentalities as it makes them to be more helpful and proactive in their societies. 
 
To sum up, mixing all prisoners together is the main cause of many offenders to do more crimes. However, following the offered solutions might help offenders to become more productive for their societies.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 320, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...me, might commit more crimes afterward. this due to several factors such as mix all ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, in contrast, kind of, no doubt, such as, first of all, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3481.0 1615.20841683 216% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 507.0 315.596192385 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.86587771203 5.12529762239 134% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 5.30231664606 2.80592935109 189% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453648915187 0.561755894193 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 949.5 506.74238477 187% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 198.537594603 49.4020404114 402% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 204.764705882 106.682146367 192% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8235294118 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.52941176471 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0666541520857 0.244688304435 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0329847054433 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0281800796517 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.042417730149 0.151304729494 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403673402435 0.056905535591 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.8 13.0946893788 197% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 16.66 50.2224549098 33% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 11.3001002004 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 23.16 12.4159519038 187% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 9.78957915832 215% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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