Many parents complain that computer games have no value to their children's studies. On the contrary, those games have produced a lot of negative effects on their mental and physical development. What is your opinion?
Playing computer games, these days, is gaining popularity among many children and many of them consider it as their best pastime. However, a large number of guardians believe that those games are worthless to their children’s education. In fact, they are having harmful effects, both physical and psychological, on the growth of their child. In my opinion, it is absolutely true that they are useless.
To begin with, one of the most evident drawbacks of those video games is that they are addictive. Children spend an inordinate amount of time sitting in front of computer while playing. As a result, several health problems are prevalent among such youngsters, and one of them is obesity, which is due to lack of any physical activity. A recent survey, conducted by WHO (World Health Organisation), shows that more than 75 per cent of adults who would play enormous computer games in their childhood suffer from obesity. In addition, weak eyesight is also very common in children and this is because of the radiation coming out from the screen. These radiations are extremely harmful for eyes of any human. According to the eye-specialist, exposure to computer screen radiation more than six hours a day continuously can not only damage eyesight, but also affects the brain.
In a similar way, those computer games are having a detrimental impact on the mental development of a child. As most of them are violent, they affect the attitude of a player and make him less emphatic and more rigid, or sometimes impolite. Furthermore, some of games are sexual; therefore, it distracts a child from his studies and ultimately a child becomes socially inept because of these adverse effects.
In summary, indulgence in video games has deleterious effect, both physiological and psychological, on the children and, I believe that it is time to limit the use of it. If action is not taken yet, it might be too late later to do something.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 140, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ider it as their best pastime. However, a large number of guardians believe that those games are ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "In a similar way" with adverb for "similar"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...eyesight, but also affects the brain. In a similar way, those computer games are having a detr...
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Line 3, column 255, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the games') or simply say ''some games''.
Suggestion: some of the games; some games
...id, or sometimes impolite. Furthermore, some of games are sexual; therefore, it distracts a c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, while, in addition, in fact, in summary, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1615.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98456790123 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82977903156 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586419753086 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2895526711 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.9375 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.375 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246963669052 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744050978372 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689664080054 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14540016226 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767358062612 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.