many parents encourage young people to leave home when they become older, while others think they should stay at home with the family.
Discuss both the view and give your opinion.
In today's world, there is a need to relocate to the most demanding place for better employment and career opportunities. Most of the aged parents believe that their off springs should go out and en-cash such opportunities, however small percentage considers to stay with family and manage to explore with the existing opportunities.In my opinion, it is good to stay with family and excel with available option.
There are many facets which support my view, For instance, if adolescents stay with their family, they can take care of their parents and grand parents health. Although youth lacks opportunities to explore within their city, but there exist a lot of scope for development and introduction of new business model in their vicinity. For example, Rahil was from small village, amethi and was never interested in moving to urban cities, hence; he started a Small scale industry with the help of family members in their village a decade ago, and now after several ups and down in his business, the company has turned out to be one of the Fortune 500 companies in his state. This proves that staying with family in their town will help to prosper as well as provides an opportunity to take care of aged people in the family.
On the other hand, few parents believe that youths should be allowed to lead an independent life away from their hometown, as it helps them to know the true value and struggle involved in leading their life. Though it is hard for both elderly parents and youth, it helps both of them to stay independent and makes them believe in the concept of self help. However this has several negtive impact, such as, it may lead to decline in the family bonding. In some cases, this leads to depression, a sense of isolation and so on among the family member. Hence its always good to stay with family as quote states, the family which sticks together, stays long together.
In Conclusion, I believe that once parents reach the age of sixties it is always advisable to stay with them, as they need support of their off spring for both financial and emotional needs and this helps to build a sense of togetherness amongst the family members.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'considers staying'.
Suggestion: considers staying
...opportunities, however small percentage considers to stay with family and manage to explore with ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...explore with the existing opportunities.In my opinion, it is good to stay with fam...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...it helps them to know the true value and struggle involved in leading their life....
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g their life. Though it is hard for both elderly parents and youth, it helps both...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...em believe in the concept of self help. However this has several negtive impact, such a...
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Suggestion: Hence,
...tion and so on among the family member. Hence its always good to stay with family as ...
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Suggestion:
...hey need support of their off spring for both financial and emotional needs and t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ogetherness amongst the family members.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 41.998997996 162% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 377.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75596816976 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4952529705 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.1669857761 49.4020404114 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.416666667 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.4166666667 20.7667163134 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5 7.06120827912 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154427708394 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605665423766 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599406842536 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102041993557 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0114235736744 0.056905535591 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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