Many parents encourage young people to leave home when they become older, while others think they should stay at home with the family. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some parents want their children to leave home and live separately when they become adults whereas others believe that children should keep living with their families. While young people can support their parents when staying at home, I believe that children need to move out of their families’ houses in order to start taking responsibility.
On the one hand, people want children to keep staying with them because there will be times that they require the help of their offspring. When the young stay at home, they will be able to support their parents at any time, especially in some urgent situations. For example, last year, my best friend in college was able to get his father, who was having a heart attack, to the hospital in time thanks to him staying at home instead of the school campus. However, I feel that children cannot become independent if they keep staying with their families.
On the other hand, young people should leave home so that they can learn to take responsibility. When youngsters live away from home, they have to deal with some matters, such as paying for accommodation and buying food, by themselves. Therefore, they will need to find a job to make money, and thus, become more responsible with their lives. For instance, an article of the New York Times in 2012 indicated that 60 percent of college students, who were living in dormitories, had a job and a better management of money spending. I believe that children will grow more maturely when they choose to live away from their parents.
In conclusion, despite the fact that, when young people stay at home, they can assist their parents in times of need, I think that they should really move out and begin to take charge of their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d begin to take charge of their lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, really, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81666666667 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44962355385 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503333333333 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.2523601305 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.416666667 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9166666667 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349527302564 0.244688304435 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158430759481 0.084324248473 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876925571997 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253747129735 0.151304729494 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256676030301 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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