Many people believe that the media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with the opinion.
It is often argued that vast numbers of deleterious impacts will occur if children keep watching celebrities’ news on a regular basis. While I accept the idea that there are some drawbacks of publicizing such news, I agree that disclosing this news has remarkable benefits.
On the one hand, children who follow the news or photos of public figures get deceived by their seemingly perfect appearance and lifestyle. For example, youngsters are usually impressed by the flawless photos of their idol celebrities; therefore, they might become dissatisfied with their own bodies. this has lead many youth to try several unsafe methods in order to change their outlook, such as strict unbalanced chemical diet which may negatively influence their health. In addition, children could quit their own dreams or talents only to purse wealth and fame via much easier ways, and increasing numbers of non responsible you tubers is a salient example for this.
On the other hand, I believe that not all news related to celebrities is of negative impacts. To illustrate, when the media covers news related to public figure’s significant contributions to society or news related to their healthy lifestyle, children may become positively influenced. In Egypt, noticeable category of youngsters started to quit smoking after several intervals with non-smoking celebrities, such as Amr Diab and Tamer Hosney. Moreover, a survey by Al-Ahram journal showed that 20 percent of 9-13-years-olds has volunteered to some community work a result of a campaign which was done by a group of beloved celebrities.
To conclude, despite the possible side effects, predominately health and career related, I reiterate that sharing celebrities’ good deeds is of indispensible values on children’s behavior.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1544.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55395683453 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15697847957 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.661870503597 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 31.8132463705 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.363636364 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2727272727 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.45454545455 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116672630138 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456156888259 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0318799057542 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0659392022419 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0107964350528 0.056905535591 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.33 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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